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             海淀区初三英语复习
书面表达专项复习
书面表达检测的能力
审题能力：
    写作目的、要完成的写作任务是什么、要传递什么信息、要说明什么问题、思想性等；
组织能力：
   处理信息的能力，组织文章的逻辑性；
修改能力：
   发现问题、提高文章档次的能力；
发挥能力：
    表达简洁、地道、流畅、语言形式多样、词汇丰富、有自己的见解等。
书面表达备考策略
掌握、积累一定的句型、习惯用法等;
  （强化正确意识）
掌握各种写作要求（积累背诵一定的范文）；
（书信、日记、经历、活动、介绍，即：记事、记人、叙述活动等）
加强词、句、文训练；
（保证用词准确，不受汉语干扰）
加强审题谋篇能力的训练；
训练创造性使用语言，恰当发挥，提高写作档次
优秀作文能力要求
具备整体审题某篇能力（使短文逻辑流畅）；
具备整体、合理地处理和整合的信息能力；
具备较强的选词造句、修改、润色的能力；
发挥有度，发挥合理、自然、简洁
  （在词数有限的范围内有效地发挥）。
   一篇好的短文应该思路清晰，语言正确，文字简洁、流畅、连贯，结构严谨。
       书面表达做题思路
   1、提炼要点；
   2、扩点成句；
   3、运用连接成份，连句成文；
   4、改错，校对；
   5、润色，完成全篇。
练习
上周六，你和你们班的同学去光明农场参观。请你根据所给的英文提示词语，用英语写一篇日记。
注意：
   1、所给提示词语必须都用上；
      （可以适当发挥）
    2、词数90左右;
    3、日记开头己为你写好。
"meet"
meet, at the school gate, give a warm welcome, show…around, see crops and vegetables, have a picnic lunch, have a party, say good-bye, feel…
Saturday                                       Fine
   Last Saturday we visited the Guang Ming Farm….
写作过程
认真审题明确要求：
    1）根据汉语提示可知，应该用第一人称完成短文。
     2）因为描述的内容是已经发生的事，所以以用过去时为主。
观察英文提示词语，列出要点：
    1）集合出发  2）到达    3）参观    4）野餐
    5）娱乐         6）告别    7）感受
依照文体，组织语篇。
  （日记要按事情发生的时间顺序记述。）
"Step 1"
Step 1. Find the key words.
      meet at the school gate in the morning
      give us warm welcome
      show us around the farm
      see crops and vegetables grow well
      have a picnic in the sunshine
      have a party with the farm workers
      say good-bye to them
      feel happy
      learn a lot
"Step 2"
Step 2. Make sentences with the key words.
    We met at the school gate in the morning. The farm workers gave us a warm welcome. The leader of the farm showed us around the farm. We saw crops and vegetables grow well. At noon we had a picnic in the sunshine. We had to say good-bye to them. We all felt happy and learned a lot from the farm workers.
"Step 3"
Step 3. Make a passage with sentences.
    Early in the morning we met at the school gate. We got there by bus. The farm workers gave us a warm welcome. Then the leader (head) of the farm showed us around the farm. We were glad to see crops and vegetables grow well. At noon we had a picnic lunch in the sunshine. After a short rest, we had a party with the workers. We had a great fun singing and dancing, telling stories. The time passed quickly. We had to say good-bye to the workers. I felt very happy and refreshed. We learned a lot from what we have heard and seen （what we can’t learn from the book).
"Step 4"
Step 4. Error Correction.
    Early in the morning we met at the school gate. We got there by bus. The farm workers gave us a warm welcome. Then the leader of the farm showed us around the farm. We were glad to see crops and vegetables growing well. At noon we had a picnic lunch in the sunshine. After a short rest, we had a party with the workers. We had a great fun singing and dancing, telling stories. The time passed quickly. We had to say good-bye to the workers. I felt very happy and refreshed. We learned a lot from what we have heard and seen.
"Step 5"
Step 5. Rewrite and try to make it better.
    Early in the morning we met at the school gate and went there by bus. The farm workers gave us a warm welcome. Then the head of the farm showed us around the farm. How glad we were to see crops and vegetables growing well. We had a picnic at 12:00. After lunch, we had a party , singing and dancing. The time passed quickly. Before we knew it, we had to say good-bye to the workers. We all felt tired but very happy. Especially, we have learned what we couldn’t learn from the books.
"修改、润色应该注意的问题"
修改、润色应该注意的问题：
检查是否覆盖所有内容要点（5W）；
检查语言是否有误，如：人称、时态、短语、标点、拼写等；
词数是否符合要求，做一定增减调整；
检查用词是否丰富，句式是否多样，文章是否连贯。
"修改下列习作"
 修改下列习作。
Dear Mr Smith,
          I was pleased to get your letter and am writing to tell you something my school. Great changes have taken place since you visited our school three years ago. On one side of the road there has a new classroom building. On the other side of the road, where the playground used to be now another new building---our library. In it there have all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines. The playground is now in the front of the school. A lot of trees have been planted in and around our school.
         I hope you to come and see for yourself some day.
       Best wishes.
                                                  Yours,
                                                  Li Hua
"点评："
点评：
    该习作符合英语书信格式，能写明题目所要求的全部要点，行文比较连贯，表达也比较清楚。不足的是存在着较多的语言错误，主要表现在：
"Dear Mr Smith"
Dear Mr Smith,
       I was pleased to get your letter and am writing to tell you something my school. Great changes have taken place since you visited our school three years ago. On one side of the road there has a new classroom building. On the other side of the road, where the playground used to be now another new building---our library. In it there have all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines. The playground is now in the front of the school. A lot of trees have been planted in and around our school.
       I hope you to come and see for yourself some day.
       Best wishes.
                                                  Yours,
                                                  Li Hua
"Dear Mr Smith"
Dear Mr Smith,
       I was pleased to get your letter and am writing to tell you something my school. Great changes have taken place since you visited our school three years ago. On one side of the road there is a new classroom building. On the other side of the road, where the playground used to be now another new building---our library. In it there are all kinds of books, newspapers and magazines. The playground is now in  front of the school. A lot of trees have also been planted in and around our school.
       I hope you can come and see for yourself some day.
       Best wishes.
                                                  Yours,
                                                  Li Hua
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几点建议
考前准备：
   考前要动笔写几篇短文，写完后与范文对照。从范文中找出自己喜欢和需要的句型或词汇记忆。
"避免写错句："
避免写错句：
    短文要表达清楚，错句、语病太多肯定影响表达思想。因此，考生在写作时一定要首先做到尽量减少错误，在此基础上才可以考虑有一些句式的变化。如果为了追求句式变化而出现本可以避免的错误，同样会影响成绩。
"篇幅适中"
篇幅适中：
    由于写作的时间有限，篇幅要求80词左右，因此考生在确定段落的主题句之后，只要围绕段落的中心思想写出主要内容，把意思表达清楚即可。
"修改定稿"
修改定稿：
    修改定稿是考生在考场应试时决不能缺少的一步。写作考试中，考生要留出2-3分钟，把自己的作文通读一边，检查错句及语病。只要认真检查许多常见错误如主谓一致问题、大小写问题、拼写问题及标点符号都可以自己更正。如果考生在平时的写作训练中抓住这一环节养成习惯，正式考试时就不会忽视修改定稿了。
"练习 3：Read the following..."
练习 3：Read the following magazine advertisement in which a British girl is looking for pen-friends and you want to get in touch with her.
  ________________________________
              Name:  Helen Young
  Age: 18
  Interest: collecting coins and stamps;
                learning different languages. All
                letters will be answered.
Address:  42 Johnson Street, Edinburgh, EH9
                1LN,UK
"Write a letter to her"
Write a letter to her, telling her about:
  1) your family
  2) your school
  3) your hobbies.
  You should write about 80 words. Do not sign your own name at the end of your letter. Use “Wang Lin” instead. You don’t need to write the address.
"Dear Helen"
Dear Helen,    (很好）
       I am writing this letter in response to your advertisement.
       I am a girl of the same age with you. And I come from a happy and warm family, which includes my father, my mother, my sister and I. I am studying  in a key school far from my hometown, but I did not regret for my own choice, for the life here is very colorful and challenging. I am interested in stamp collection and I have colleted more than three thousand stamps. I also like swimming, playing tennis and some other sports.
        I wish that one day we could be good friends.
                                                          Yours Truly,
                                                            Wang Lin
"Helen Young"
Helen Young,     （较好）
      Having known that you are looking for pen-friends. I can’t wait to write to you.
      I just graduated from a high school. I am the only child in my family. My father is a businessman and my mother is a doctor. I like to play volleyball, football and basketball. Traveling is my another hobby. I have been many place in China such as Hangzhou, Ningbo and Shanghai.
     Let’s keep in touch, OK?
                                                 Sincerely yours,
                                                  Wang Lin
"Mrs"
Mrs. Young,  （及格）
      I’ve read your advertisement in a magazine. I want to be pen-friends with you.
      My name is Wang Lin. I am living in a tradition Chinese family. My father is a bus-driver. My mother is a worker, and my sister is a nurse. They are working hard.
       Now I’m studying in the Shanghai School.  My school is very beautiful. I also learned a lot of in this school.  So, I also like play tennis.
      I am waiting for your answer.
                                                       Yours,
                                                       Wang Lin